Unfortunately Marcella was absent from our feedback workshop due to illness, but today she was able to send me some feedback over email. In particular she raised questions about Rufus’ job occupation (something that I had attempted to allude to before) – she found it unclear what Rufus’ role within the cemetery was, however I believe that even though I can see where the criticism is coming from, I feel as though going into any more detail on it within the script would distract from the overall plot somewhat.

Another question raised was that of the young boy’s mother (Sarah) walking into Rufus’ bedroom as he’s breaking down – this is something that I agreed would have been odd so I tried to make it more believable by editing Sarah’s dialogue within the scene as realism within this point in particular is crucial to making the plot work.